behaving like winter has come
all i can see is red,
lined with the trim of envy
love, dont you see that the pond is dark today
today
when all of yesterdays
the grass glowed green with health and breath
today, love
the wind blows grey sheets into our vision,
like blinders that make us see
where we cannot be weak
and you, behaving like winter has dawned,
when i just said that january is green
Our january was green
but when you act
unseasonably cold
this dark pond expands to endless ocean.
and love,
do you see today
that the white gulls fly apart from black geese
because they heard it, like me,
that you declared the time to be winter
in a january that Once
was green
vl, england
posted by valerie salerie @ 3:53 a.m.
2 comments
2 Comments:
- idea began with the phrase: "behaving like winter has come"
- thought followed through with imagery of the pond and dark wet english morning (which is right now minus half an hour ago)
- originally wanted to use the phrase "you should have killed me with you", but when the poem started going, it doesn't flow very well with the rest of the movement
- january turned out to be a motif, and it works well with the title theme of "winter", and how i've been using the contrast of "green"
- capital "O" is strategic in the meaning of the words in which they are used
- favourite verse: 3rd stanza, last two lines
- cheers, friends. i had to write this one and it really locates where i am geographically as well as emotionally
"like blinders that make us see
where we cannot be weak"
it is my favourite as well.
miss talking to you V
:)
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