Affront (part i, draft i)
he sits three planks away from her on the sidewalk bench. there are three seagulls glaring pointedly at him.
breaking the pieces in her hands, she tosses the bread ends at the gray birds, and they hurriedly dive for it.
"i think they're pickier eaters than we think they are," he remarked to her, his eyes still on the seagulls, "last week someone gave them his whole hot dog and they didn't come near it all."
the hot dog vendor is two blocks from Yeats Park. on Mondays he restocks his condiments because everyone forgets to bring their lunches to work on Mondays, after the weekend activities are still hung over their minds.
"i know," she replied.
posted by valerie salerie @ 8:29 p.m.
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6 Comments:
hmm...
I'm excited to see what's to come.
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Val, you may want to look at turning on your word verification in order to prevent that kind of thing happening again, cause it can get annoying.
word verification? explain plz Dave :P
p.s. today i was at Chapters and was reading through a few sections of "Mary Poppins", and suddenly had the urge to write some children's lit :) don't know why i'm drawn to the books of my childhood (well actually, i've only seen Mary Poppins, but i think i like the book more)
:D i'm excited to post my first part of it. i've decided to write it on paper first, b/c i still think writing seriously on a computer diminishes writing itself :P anyhoo, that's just my thought.
this draft sounds very Hemingway. i don't know if i like it.. kind of scary that i'd be able to produce something similiar to his style..
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